Can i get some feedback on my two poems,,,,thanx?

I think the first poem is nice, but the second one is even better. You know, the second poem seems like it could be used in a song. It almost reminds me of "Over the Rainbow" in its style. There's something quite charming about it in that way. I wouldn't be surprised if a talented musician used your lyrics in the poem to create music for it - something that sounded like music from an earlier era...like Cole Porter's music.